The ugly, the bad and the good - Emphasis

The monstrous, the terrible and the great The revolting, the awful and the great A few sentences leave you wheezing for breath. Have a go at perusing so anyone might hear this concentrate from the minutes of an ongoing gathering of West Lindsey District Council, for instance: The Support Services Manager submitted Report 213 instructing with respect to advance made in regard of the key undertakings which must be tended to by the Council and the rules concerning when they should be finished all together that the prerequisites to present Best Value can be met. On the off chance that youre anything like us, you should peruse it a few times to comprehend what its attempting to state. The sentence is excessively long and would be much more clear composed as two separate sentences: The Support Service Manager submitted Report 213 informing regarding progress made in regard of the key errands which must be tended to by the Council. It additionally discloses the rules with respect to when the undertakings should be finished all together that the prerequisites to present Best Value can be met. This makes it more clear. In any case, there are still such a large number of repetitive words: in regard of; concerning when; all together that. Furthermore, a couple of uninvolved action words that make the sentence cumbersome and less straightforward: must be tended to; should be finished; can be met. An all around put comma may help as well. So lets attempt once more: The Support Service Manager submitted Report 213, sketching out the Councils progress on key undertakings. The Council must address these undertakings inside the time rules so as to present Best Value. Alright so it is anything but a sentence that is going to make some serious waves. In any case, in any event its brisk and simple to peruse.